User talk:Tripodssj6

River Song
Hi! I'm taking this chance to discuss with you your edit of River Song. While it is true that Hitler shoots her after the TARDIS lands, and clearly you wish this noted, you fall into a common error. Unless one deliberately notes otherwise, in any narrative sentence actions take place in the order in which they are written. One does not plunk down sentences in random order: George Washington was President of the United States and fought in the French and Indian War. He died in 1797 and was born in 1732." No, you rationally place these events in their natural chronological order and the reader understands them this way. So "Later" or "after" is unnecessary. Nor is the "minutes later" -- actually, I think it's less than a minute -- of much utility given that it's all part of the same scene.

A well written article is a compromise between getting in all the necessary details -- with, hopefully, enough grace notes to make it interesting -- and a little compassion for the reader, wh may wish find a particular point and then go do something else. Although my usual style of writing is a bit more conversational than is usual in this wiki, I think that a brief style is warranted here and only if one is so terse that meaning is obscured should a bit of padding be used. Do you think that is what happens without your additions to the article?

I do wish to thank you sincerely for your helpfulness. We need people who care enough about the subject to make this wiki better. It's simply that I believe it is miscalculated in this particular case. Boblipton talk to me 13:29, October 21, 2011 (UTC) 07:18: Wed 21 Dec 2011