User:SOTO/Forum Archive/The Panopticon/@comment-9435571-20130724194223/@comment-188432-20130812194840

I've reread the whole thread and am now a little more confused than I was. (Sorry!) I've noted your more hesitant, conjectural tone at the beginning of the thread, so I'm not sure what the facts that you found (thanks again for doing that!) are meant to prove or disprove. So let's start from the very beginning again.

Here's the complete text of the sidebar about MacQueen. Please explain, using the paragraph numbers provided, what you currently disagree with, and what proof you have. Remember, too, that this is a sidebar. It's not written in an in-universe way. It's a behind-the-scenes note drug up to a part of the text that may not exactly fit in the timeline being established int he article. This page is kind of like a magazine page in that it has little boxes of information that offset other information. If you're worried that it's not precisely at the "right" place vis-a-vis the text to the left, don't be. It's placed under a section head so that will work most effectively.

Anwyay, here's the text. Please explain, by number, what troubles you, and what proof you have to back up a proposed change: