User:SOTO/Forum Archive/The Panopticon/@comment-188432-20130304024346/@comment-26975268-20130309204901


 * 1) Once again, jelly babies not clear. I'll refer you to my comment upthread on your last draft. I'd recommend getting rid of it.
 * 2) You're starting to get the idea as far as the scarf. I would do a little less wibbly (ie. more straight), but aside from that, it's very good.