User:SOTO/Forum Archive/The Panopticon/@comment-8107636-20130607102031/@comment-188432-20130609155834

User:SOTO/Forum Archive/The Panopticon/@comment-8107636-20130607102031/@comment-188432-20130609155834 To address your concerns, I've now rewritten the lead. Hopefully, you'll find that a little better.